April 14, 2021
I blew my chance
I'd like to take a few minutes to talk about this phrasal verb because I can relate to it right now. This morning, I was given the chance to take part in a workshop organized by a great teacher, but I blew it. I felt so thrilled when I heard the news, I couldn't believe it, but then the teacher started to ask me a few questions which I think I answered all well, and then he asked me to send him an audio message telling him a little bit about myself. No sooner had I sent the audio than I realized I was sounding ridiculous, overly happy, repetitive, I also made a few grammar mistakes. All that happiness turned into shame very fast. I've been longing for an opportunity like that for years, and when It finally happens, I ruin it.
I felt so bad and embarrassed, that I deleted all the audios. I haven't gotten any other messages from him, and I don't blame him. Once again my anxiety affected my performance and made me look like a crazy person. But this time instead of spending the rest of the day under the blankets, in the dark, crying, I've decided to own it. I've decided to understand my behavior and find ways to accept what happened and move on. I will keep trying to improve my English skills, even if I have to reinvent myself.
I blew my chance
I'd like to take a few minutes to talk about this phrasal verb because I can relate to it right now.
This morning, I was given the chance to take part in a workshop organized by a great teacher, but I blew it.
I felt so thrilled when I heard the news, I couldn't believe it, but then t. The teacher started to ask me a few questions, which I think I answered all well, andbut then he asked me to send him an audio message telling him a little bit about myself.
This sentence ran on a bit, so I suggest breaking it up. And the placement of the "but" here is a bit odd - you want the "but" to be where things started to take a different course, where what you're about to say contradicts what you said before. If you answered the questions well, it's a bit strange to use "but" - at this point things are still good! It fits better with the audio message, if that's where things went wrong.
No sooner had I sent the audio than I realized I washad soundinged ridiculous, overly happy, repetitive,. I also made a few grammar mistakes.
Past progressive sounds weird here. It feels like a completed action, you talked and then you finished talking, and the way you talked created an impression. You sounded, you had sounded, you even "would sound" if you think of him listening to the message in the future. You might say "I was sounding ridiculous" if you were describing while the action was *ongoing* - "I started talking to him, but I quickly realised that I was sounding ridiculous so I shut up."
I think if you can end a sentence after a list like "ridiculous, overly happy, repetitive", then you should. Here you can, so I would. Not sure if that's common or just me, but it seems like a good way to avoid run-on sentences.
All that happiness turned into shame very fast.
I've been longing for an opportunity like that for years, and when Iit finally happens, I ruin it.
I felt so bad and embarrassed, that I deleted all the audios.
Uncountable, usually.
I haven't gotten any other messages from him, and I don't blame him.
Once again my anxiety affected my performance and made me look like a crazy person.
But this time instead of spending the rest of the day under the blankets, in the dark, crying, I've decided to own it.
I've decided to understand my behavior and find ways to accept what happened and move on.
I will keep trying to improve my English skills, even if I have to reinvent myself.
Feedback
Well-written, shame it's such an unhappy story!
You know there's no reason not to get back in touch with him, right? Just record another message, apologise and tell him you got all anxious, he might be cool with it and even if he isn't, nothing bad's going to happen. From one irrational person to another, I know exactly how easy it is to say that and how hard it is to do it, believe me :) but I feel I need to say it in case you haven't thought that.
April 19, 2021
Thank you so much for the corrections and your kind words. :)
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Blew a chance |
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I'd like to take a few minutes to talk about this phrasal verb because I can relate to it right now. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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This morning, I was offered a chance to take part in a workshop organized by a great teacher, but I blew it. |
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I felt so thrilled when I heard the news, I couldn't believe it, but then the teacher started to ask me a few questions which I think I answered all well, and then he asked me to send him an audio message telling him a little bit about myself. I felt so thrilled when I heard the news, I couldn't believe it This sentence ran on a bit, so I suggest breaking it up. And the placement of the "but" here is a bit odd - you want the "but" to be where things started to take a different course, where what you're about to say contradicts what you said before. If you answered the questions well, it's a bit strange to use "but" - at this point things are still good! It fits better with the audio message, if that's where things went wrong. |
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No sooner had I sent the audio than I realized I was sounding ridiculous, overly happy, repetitive, I also made a few grammar mistakes. No sooner had I sent the audio than I realized I Past progressive sounds weird here. It feels like a completed action, you talked and then you finished talking, and the way you talked created an impression. You sounded, you had sounded, you even "would sound" if you think of him listening to the message in the future. You might say "I was sounding ridiculous" if you were describing while the action was *ongoing* - "I started talking to him, but I quickly realised that I was sounding ridiculous so I shut up." I think if you can end a sentence after a list like "ridiculous, overly happy, repetitive", then you should. Here you can, so I would. Not sure if that's common or just me, but it seems like a good way to avoid run-on sentences. |
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All that happiness turned into shame very fast. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I've been longing for an opportunity like that for years, and when It finally happens, I ruin it. I've been longing for an opportunity like that for years, and when |
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I felt so bad and embarrassed, that I deleted all the audios. I felt so bad and embarrassed Uncountable, usually. |
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I haven't gotten any other messages from him, and I don't blame him. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Once again my anxiety affected my performance and made me look like a crazy person. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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But this time instead of spending the rest of the day under the blankets, in the dark, crying, I've decided to own it. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I've decided to understand my behavior and find ways to accept what happened and move on. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I will keep trying to improve my English skills, even if I have to reinvent myself. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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This morning, I was given a chance to take part in a workshop organized by a great teacher, but I blew it. |
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This morning, I was given the chance to take part in a workshop organized by a great teacher, but I blew it. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I blew my chance This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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