Aug. 27, 2025
PART 1 Are celebrities good role models for young people?
The role of finding the right example for young people is hard to overestimate. Nowadays, plenty of youngsters are inspired by famous Hollywood stars, all sorts of influencers and other celebrities and try to emulate them. While some argue that media widen the range of role models, others believe that it can create an array of self-esteem and mental health problems. This essay will examine both positive and negative sides of this trend before asserting that it is rather a detrimental one.
On the one hand, having the whole internet on hand to find an appropriate role model can help tremendously. Moreover, not everyone was lucky enough to born in a decent family. For example, when a parent is dependent on drugs, it would be much better to take an example from someone advocating for healthy lifestyle and self-improvement. From this standpoint, being exposed to an enormous number of potential role models as someone who struggles to find a right example among family members can be more than valuable.
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PART 1 Are celebrities good role models for young people?
The role of finding the right exampleimportance of being a good role model for young people is hard to overestimate.
(1) The first half of the sentence is awkward. I have rewritten it so it sounds more natural.
(2) "Overestimate" isn't used this way. We'd use "overstate" in this context instead.
Nowadays, plenty ofmany youngsters are inspired by famous Hollywood stars, all sorts of influencers and other celebrities and try to emulate them.
In my experience, "plenty" implies that there's a specific amount that can be deemed "sufficient". Reading your sentence, I feel "many" might be more natural-sounding, at least to me.
While some argue that social media widens the range of role models one can follow, others believe that it can create an arause a plethoray of self-esteem and mental health problems.
(1) If referring to the Internet, you should specify "social media". "Media" is a broader term and can also refer to things like newspapers.
(2) Although "media" is technically a plural noun, in certain contexts such as this one, it is a singular COLLECTIVE noun.
(3) Just saying "widens the range of role models" might not be as clear.
(4) I have reworded the second half of the sentence so that it sounds more natural.
This essay will examine both the positive and negative sides of this trend before asserting that it is rathergenerally a detrimental one.
On the one hand, having the whole internet on handat one's fingertips to find an appropriate role model can help tremendously.
"At (someone's) fingertips" is a fairly common set phrase.
Moreover, not everyone was lucky enough to be born into a decent family.
For example, when a parent is dependent on drugs, it would be much better to take anfollow the example ofrom someone advocating for a healthy lifestyle and self-improvement.
Instead of "for example" at the start, I might choose to use "for instance" instead, since you also used "example" later in the sentence.
From this standpoint, being exposed to an enormous number of potential role models as someone who struggles to find a right example among family members can be more than valuable.
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Moreover, not everyone was lucky enough to born in a decent family. Moreover, not everyone was lucky enough to be born into a |
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It can lead to serious ramifications, especially among young teenagers. |
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To draw a conclusion, although the quantity of potential role models in media might surpass the quantity of those in a family, the quality and the consequences of the former might be quite doubtful, mildly put. |
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Therefore, I prefer the motto ''Quality over quantity''. |
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On the one hand, having the whole internet on hand to find an appropriate role model can help tremendously. On the one hand, having the whole internet "At (someone's) fingertips" is a fairly common set phrase. |
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Are celebrities good role models for young people? C1 IELTS |
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On the other hand, media invariably appear personalities with doubtful reputations, for instance some fringe elements or infamous radicals. |
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Additionally, role models such as profesional bodybuilders or Hollywood superstars often create unachievable body and beauty standarts. |
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For instance, since 2005, the year Facebook started to gain momentum, the rate of adolescents reporting symptoms of major depression in a given year increased by 52%. |
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In my opinion, the disatvantages overall outweigh the advantages. |
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Being a teenager, one is especially prone to polarized opinions and controversial world views. |
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This essay will examine both positive and negative sides of this trend before asserting that it is rather a detrimental one. This essay will examine both the positive and negative sides of this trend before asserting that it is |
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For example, when a parent is dependent on drugs, it would be much better to take an example from someone advocating for healthy lifestyle and self-improvement. For example, when a parent is dependent on drugs, it would be much better to Instead of "for example" at the start, I might choose to use "for instance" instead, since you also used "example" later in the sentence. |
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From this standpoint, being exposed to an enormous number of potential role models as someone who struggles to find a right example among family members can be more than valuable. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Except for some rare and grave cases, family members should be the ones to look up to, not random celebrities. |
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PART 1 Are celebrities good role models for young people? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The role of finding the right example for young people is hard to overestimate. The (1) The first half of the sentence is awkward. I have rewritten it so it sounds more natural. (2) "Overestimate" isn't used this way. We'd use "overstate" in this context instead. |
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Nowadays, plenty of youngsters are inspired by famous Hollywood stars, all sorts of influencers and other celebrities and try to emulate them. Nowadays, In my experience, "plenty" implies that there's a specific amount that can be deemed "sufficient". Reading your sentence, I feel "many" might be more natural-sounding, at least to me. |
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While some argue that media widen the range of role models, others believe that it can create an array of self-esteem and mental health problems. While some argue that social media widens the range of role models one can follow, others believe that it can c (1) If referring to the Internet, you should specify "social media". "Media" is a broader term and can also refer to things like newspapers. (2) Although "media" is technically a plural noun, in certain contexts such as this one, it is a singular COLLECTIVE noun. (3) Just saying "widens the range of role models" might not be as clear. (4) I have reworded the second half of the sentence so that it sounds more natural. |
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