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"it's expected" implies you are talking about, say, societal expectations. For instance: "It was expected that girls should love soft, pink things". You are talking about what a group, oftentimes a majority, would expect out of something.

In this context, "it's expected" feels strange, so I've used "it's likely that...". Though, you might also say "With our environment, I'd expect that the internet..."

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"For a personal perspective" is very formal and kind of odd, especially here. I'd probably say something like "personally", even in more formal writing.

After "personally", when talking about a personal opinion, I would usually follow it with "I think" or "I don't think" (or "wouldn't think" or "didn't think", etc).

Alternatively, I might say something like, "Personally, I wouldn't choose a side...", but this comes off more as what you think OTHERS should do (as well as yourself). This sentence would feel almost like a warning.


This is a case where I'd use "both". It helps make both "the bad" and "the good" feel more distinct. Without a "both", this sentence feels a little awkward to me.

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"This" can be used when talking about something that we have just been talking about for a while, usually when it's not a physical place or thing. In fact, you could shorten it even further to "...start more conversations about this".

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I think it sounds better to say "modern environment" or "current-day environment", to emphasize new technologies are thought to be impacting the way we process information.

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This type of change it's due to the plasticity that our brains have, although it decreases with the time, it doesn't disappear even at an old age with ahen the brain that is changing constantly.

wWith our environment it's expectbelieved that the internet and devices that access our minds are molding the way we process information.

I think this is what you're trying to say. You're original word choice isn't wrong, but 'believed' makes more sense in the context.

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