May 23, 2025
A grievous summer in Mandalay
It's now 11:23 in the morning in Myanmar. It's sunny but not too hot today, perhaps, yesterday's downpour had cool down the scorching weather. Looking through my bedroom window, i saw a huge mountain of cumulus clouds drifting in the sky wearily, and the mountains in the distance look so dull and mournful , surrounding the city.
Only if there weren't the earthquake a month ago, I could have been at school right now, chatting and laughing with my friends happily. But now, I am stuck in my bedroom, trying to study but has no motivation or will to do so.
I had imagine this year's summer has to be full of fun and interesting activities, but that dream had crumbled along with the catastrophic earthquake. It had destroyed countless building in the downtown and historical heritages. The places I used to visit remained a pile of rubbles and some people I know had already left the world in the disaster. Every morning I woke up, I imagine this is all just a dream - only to realize it's painfully real.
# I don't know what to write, so I just wrote about what I feel. Feel free to correct my writing.
A grievousmiserable summer in Mandalay
grievous: (of something bad) very severe or serious. "Grievous" isn't an appropriate word to use here. Instead, you can consider "miserable", "dull", "depressing", "dreary", etc.
It's now 11:23 in the morning in Myanmar.
It's sunny but not too hot today, perhaps, yesterday's downpour had cooled down the scorching weather.
Looking through my bedroom window, iI saw a huge mountain of cumulus clouds drifting in the sky wearily, and the mountains in the distance looked so dull and mournful , surrounding the city.
OIf only if there weren'thadn't been the earthquake a month ago, I could have been at school right now, chatting and laughing with my friends happily.
But now, I am stuck in my bedroom, trying to study but hasve no motivation or will to do so.
This is a compound sentence. Based on your original sentence, the two clauses are:
(A) I am stuck in my bedroom, trying to study.
(B) I has no motivation or will to do so.
Now, it should be more obvious that (B) is ungrammatical.
I had imagined this year's summer has to be full of fun and interesting activities, but that dream had crumbled along with the catastrophic earthquake.
ItThe earthquake had destroyed countless buildings in the downtown and historical heritagstructures.
(1) It would be good to state explicitly the subject here, and make it clear that you're now talking about the earthquake. In the previous sentence, the subject was "that dream", so the "it" in this sentence might be interpreted to be referring "that dream", which is clearly not what you intended.
(2) I've never seen "heritage" being used this way. Buildings can be part of a heritage, but "heritage" also encompasses more abstract objects like cultural values and traditions.
The places I used to visit remained a pile of rubbles, and some people I know had already left the world in the disaster.
(1) "Rubble" is an uncountable noun.
(2) You can consider a comma break.
Every morning I woake up, I imagine this is all just a dream - only to realize it's painfully real.
Mind the tense. "Every morning" is in the present tense.
# I don't know what to write, so I just wrote about what I feel.
Feel free to correct my writing.
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My sincerest condolences.
May 26, 2025
Thank you for your kind condolences and the helpful corrections.
It's now 11:23 am in the morning in Myanmar.
It's sunny but not too hot today, perhaps, yesterday's downpour had cooled down the scorching weather.
Looking through my bedroom window, iI saw a huge mountain of cumulus clouds drifting in the sky wearily, and the mountains in the distance looked so dull and mournful , surrounding the city.
"I" is always capitalized.
Only if there wereasn't thean earthquake a month ago/ last month, I could have been at school right now, chatting and laughing with my friends happily.
But now, I am stuck in my bedroom, trying to study but hasve no motivation or will to do so.
I had imagined this year's summer has to be full of fun and interesting activities, but that dream had crumbled along with the catastrophic earthquake.
It had destroyed countless buildings in the downtown and historical heritages.
The places I used to visit remained a pile of rubbles and some people I know had already left the world inwith the disaster.
Every morning I woake up, I imagine (that) this iwas all just a dream - only to realize it's painfully real.
# I don't know what to write, so I just wrote about what I feel (like)/ my feelings.
Feel free to correct/ mark my writing.
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Good job! I am sorry to hear about this devasting incident and can only hope everything gets better soon.
May 26, 2025
Thank you for your sympathy and kind wishes. I'm hopeful that things will improve too.
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A grievous summer in Mandalay A grievous: (of something bad) very severe or serious. "Grievous" isn't an appropriate word to use here. Instead, you can consider "miserable", "dull", "depressing", "dreary", etc. |
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It's now 11:23 in the morning in Myanmar. It's now 11:23 am in the morning in Myanmar. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It's sunny but not too hot today, perhaps, yesterday's downpour had cool down the scorching weather. It's sunny but not too hot today, perhaps, yesterday's downpour had cooled down the scorching weather. It's sunny but not too hot today, perhaps, yesterday's downpour had cooled down the scorching weather. |
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Looking through my bedroom window, i saw a huge mountain of cumulus clouds drifting in the sky wearily, and the mountains in the distance look so dull and mournful , surrounding the city. Looking through my bedroom window, "I" is always capitalized. Looking through my bedroom window, |
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But now, I am stuck in my bedroom, trying to study but has no motivation or will to do so. But now, I am stuck in my bedroom, trying to study but ha But now, I am stuck in my bedroom, trying to study but ha This is a compound sentence. Based on your original sentence, the two clauses are: (A) I am stuck in my bedroom, trying to study. (B) I has no motivation or will to do so. Now, it should be more obvious that (B) is ungrammatical. |
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I had imagine this year's summer has to be full of fun and interesting activities, but that dream had crumbled along with the catastrophic earthquake. I had imagined this year's summer I had imagined this year's summer |
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It had destroyed countless building in the downtown and historical heritages. It had destroyed countless buildings in the downtown and historical heritages.
(1) It would be good to state explicitly the subject here, and make it clear that you're now talking about the earthquake. In the previous sentence, the subject was "that dream", so the "it" in this sentence might be interpreted to be referring "that dream", which is clearly not what you intended. (2) I've never seen "heritage" being used this way. Buildings can be part of a heritage, but "heritage" also encompasses more abstract objects like cultural values and traditions. |
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The places I used to visit remained a pile of rubbles and some people I know had already left the world in the disaster. The places I used to visit remained a pile of rubbles and some people I know had already left the world The places I used to visit remained a pile of rubble (1) "Rubble" is an uncountable noun. (2) You can consider a comma break. |
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Every morning I woke up, I imagine this is all just a dream - only to realize it's painfully real. Every morning I w Every morning I w Mind the tense. "Every morning" is in the present tense. |
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# I don't know what to write, so I just wrote about what I feel. # I don't know what to write, so I just wrote about what I feel (like)/ my feelings. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Feel free to correct my writing. Feel free to correct/ mark my writing. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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