Day Five of Lunar New Year's Day Five

More natural sounding this way

This holiday is very fulfilling tofor me.

Both are correct, but “for me” is my preference, choose whichever you prefer!

My familyparents, my siblings, and their kids all went to myour hometown to have the New Year's Eve dinner with my parents, my siblings and their kidsas a family.

our hometown (since it is the hometown of your whole family), then changed the sentence order to make it more clear. If you say family first, then later say who your family is, it feels redundant. But if you say who first, then say “as a family”, this emphasizes the feeling of family.

After dinner, we went to sisang, chatted, and laughed.

past tense

Then my wife and I came back home, but we left myour daughter at my hometown, because she likeds to play with the kids there.

our daughter (assuming your daughter is also your wife’s child), she likes, not liked, because here you are stating a fact, so you should use present tense

It was a little cold there, butand it was very crowded.

conjunction correction

There were many Spring Festiveal activities, such as lion dances, iron flower performances and, blessing garden events, etc.

If you say “etc.” you don’t need “and”

ExceptIn addition to these activities, we had lots of delicious food too.

除了…意外，..都.. = except, other than, not including
除了…意外，..也/还.. = in addition

Now I'm atback home and planning to go to my hometown and pick up my daughter.

“back” emphasizes you have returned

Lunar New Year's: Day Five

Looks cleaner!

It's the fifth day of Lunar New Year today, so the holiday is already halfway over.

I would make this a subordinate clause here because it makes the sentence flow better- not wrong though!

This holidayLunar New Year is very fulfilling to me.

Stating "This holiday" is a unclear and because the sentence is by itself, it makes more sense to add a subject.

My family went to my hometown to have thea New Year's Eve dinner with my parents, my siblings, and their kids.

Dinner is spelling incorrectly, and always put a comma before "and" if it's in a list and separating subjects!

After dinner, we went to sisung, chatted and laughed.

Make them all the same tense/ format.

The next day, my brother and I visited our relatives, some of them had changed a lot compared to years ago.

ThenAfterwards, my wife and I came back home and left my daughter at my hometown, because she likeds to play with the kids there.

There were many Spring Festive activities, such as lion dances, iron flower performances, and blessing garden events, etc.

Except these activities, wWe had lots of delicious food too.

Lunar New Year's: Day Five

I feel like putting the colon : makes the title look neater.

It's the fifth day of Lunar New Year today,; the holiday is already halfway over.

A semicolon ; is better for this. It's in between a comma and full stop.

TI find this holiday is very fulfilling to me.

My family went to my hometown to have the New Year's Eve dinner with my parents, my siblings and their kids.

After dinner, we went to sing, chattedstarted ¶
to sing. We also chatted amongst ourselves and laughed.

The next day, my brother and I visited our relatives, ; some of them had changed a lot compared to years ago.

A semi colon is better than a comma after the word "relatives"

ThenLater, my wife and I came back home and left my daughter at my hometown, because she liked to playing with the kids there.

It was a little cold there, but it was and very crowded.

There were many Spring Festiveal activities, such as lion dances, iron flower performances and blessing garden events, etc.

ExceptAs well as these activities, we had lots of delicious food too.

Now I'm at home and, planning to go to my hometown and pick up my daughter.

The Fifth Lunar New Year's Day Five

This holiday is very fulfilling tofor me.

My family went to my hometown to have the New Year's Eve dinner with my parents, my siblings and their kids.

After dinner, we went to sisang, chatted and laughed.

The next day, my brother and I visited our relatives,. sSome of them hadve changed a lot compared toover the years ago.

This isn't grammatically incorrect, it just sounds a little unnatural in English. You could also say, "Some of them have changed a lot since our childhood."

Then my wife and I came back home, leftaving my daughter atin my hometown, because she liked tos playing with the kids there.

There were many Sspring Ffestive activities, such as lion dances, iron flower performances and blessing garden events, etc.

ExceptAs well as these activities, we had lots of delicious food too.

Now I'm at home and planning to go to my hometown andto pick up my daughter.