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Dojega

Jan. 24, 2025

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燠の虚
落下夕焼け
流れ星

おきのそら
らっかゆうやけ
ながれぼし

長崎市の夕日を見ながら、これを書いた。

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燠の虚
落下夕焼け
流れ星

おきのそら
らっかゆうやけ
ながれぼし

長崎市の夕日を見ながら、これを書いた。

「燠の虚」ってあまり聞かない言葉だけど、どんな意味?

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Dojega

Jan. 25, 2025

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I used 燠 to represent embers or live charcoal, as I feel like watching the embers of a fire flicker makes people thoughtful, and perhaps be reminded of the ephemerality of life. 虚 was a better kanji to use than 空 in this context, as I felt like 虚 gives a more empty feeling of a vast, empty sky, much like outer space. When combined together, I feel like someone could imagine the soft flickering of burning embers amongst a void of nothing, which gives both a peaceful and existential feeling. I thought it might paint a picture of transience. What do you think?

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wanderer

Jan. 25, 2025

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Oh, you write such a deep meaning in your Haiku !
Haiku sometimes uses special words to express the feeling of the writer.
Actually I don't know much about Haiku, and could not understand it....but after reading your explanation, I think it's good for you to select the kanji.

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Dojega

Jan. 25, 2025

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I'm glad you think so, thank you!

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燠の虚 落下夕焼け 流れ星 おきのそら らっかゆうやけ ながれぼし 長崎市の夕日を見ながら、これを書いた。


燠の虚
落下夕焼け
流れ星

おきのそら
らっかゆうやけ
ながれぼし

長崎市の夕日を見ながら、これを書いた。

「燠の虚」ってあまり聞かない言葉だけど、どんな意味?

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