June 29, 2021
Writing: Commitment
Some advertisements are keen to write "solemn promises", but the content of the promises is a matter of course, but it has become a great virtue to proclaim. In this day and age, more and more celebrities like to establish a persona and companies have a corporate culture. Some of these markers do not mark the upper limit of what they want to achieve, but rather their bottom line. If you keep raising the upper limit, it will help the growth of individuals, companies and even society; on the contrary, if you keep emphasizing the lower limit, it means that for more labels may keep lowering their bottom line, leading to a poorer social atmosphere.
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It is very hard to understand overall what is meant here. The use of the phrases “upper and lower limits” seems confusing - limits are boundaries, not moral behavior. Similarly “bottom line” is used both correctly to mean profits and also seems to be used here to mean bad behavior,
In general I would keep the structure and language simpler and clearer when writing. You seem to be keen to make this sound elevated, but that merely makes it confusing. Use clear simple language and it will be more impactful.
July 5, 2021
Those revised sentences are what I want to express. Thank you very much!
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在一些广告上热衷于写一些“郑重承诺”，但承诺的内容却是本分事，但却成为了大肆宣扬的优点。在当今时代，越来越多的明星喜欢建立人设，公司拥有企业文化，但这些标致标识的并不是他们想要达到的上限，而是标注了他们的底线。如果不断提升上限，会帮助个人、企业乃至社会的成长；反之如果不断强调下限，就意味着为了更加多的标签可能会不断降低下限，导致比差的社会氛围。 |
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In some advertisements, they are keen to write "solemn promises", but the content of the promises is a matter of course, but it has become a great virtue to proclaim. |
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In this day and age, more and more celebrities like to establish a persona and companies have a corporate culture, but these markers do not mark the upper limit of what they want to achieve, but rather their bottom line. |
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If you keep raising the upper limit, it will help the growth of individuals, companies and even society; on the contrary, if you keep emphasizing the lower limit, it means that for more labels may keep lowering the lower limit, leading to a poorer than poor social atmosphere. |
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Some advertisements are keen to write "solemn promises", but the content of the promises is a matter of course, but it has become a great virtue to proclaim. Some advertisements are keen to |
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In this day and age, more and more celebrities like to establish a persona and companies have a corporate culture. In this day and age |
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Some of these markers do not mark the upper limit of what they want to achieve, but rather their bottom line. Some of Its extremely hard to know what you are trying to say here.
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If you keep raising the upper limit, it will help the growth of individuals, companies and even society; on the contrary, if you keep emphasizing the lower limit, it means that for more labels may keep lowering their bottom line, leading to a poorer social atmosphere. If you keep |
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