Jan. 16, 2022
Swimming Pool for Kids
My kids really like swimming, but it isn't possible to go to any swimming pool now because of COVID-19.
One day, I saw a nice swimming pool in a house that is for renting to tourists.
So I borrowed the house 6 hours with 200$.
It was quite expensive for me, however, I didn't regret when I went there.
In the house, there were many toys and books as well.
One side of the wall of the pool, we could watch video contents for kids using a projector.
My kids really liked there and enjoyed for about 6 hours.
If I have a chance, I want to go there again.
Swimming Pool for Kids
My kids really like swimming, but it isn't possible to go to any swimming pool now because of COVID-19.
One day, I saw a nice swimming pool in a house that isavailable for renting to by tourists.
So I borrowrented the house for 6 hours, with $200$.
Just a note: in English, the dollar sign ($) goes before the number amount. So, "two hundred dollars" would be $200.
It was quite expensive for me, thowever,ugh I didn't regret it when I went there.
In the house, there were many toys and books as well.
On one side of the wall of the pool, we could watch video contents for kids using a projectorpool wall, we could use a projector to watch videos for the kids.
I just re-worded your sentence a bit to make it sound more natural, but nothing was wrong with your original sentence.
My kids really liked it there, and enjoyed swimming for about 6 hours.
If I have athe chance, I want to go there again.
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Great job! I'm glad your kids enjoyed the chance to swim!
One day, I saw a nice swimming pool in a house that is for renting to tourists.
So I borrowrented the house for 6 hours with $200$.
“Rented” is a more appropriate word. When doing something for a certain amount of time “for” is used.
It was quite expensive for me, however, I didn't regret it when I went there.
“Regret” normally is used with a noun, in this case “it” would be used.
My kids really liked it there and enjoyed there for about 6 hours.
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Some of these corrections may be more stylistic choices. But some of the verbs/adjectives used needed a noun. A lot of the time using “it” or “there” is fine if both parties are aware of the context.
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My kids really like swimming, but it isn't possible to go to any swimming pool now because of COVID-19. |
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One day, I saw a nice swimming pool in a house that is for renting to tourists. One day, I saw a nice swimming pool in a house One day, I saw a nice swimming pool in a house that is |
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So I borrowed the house 6 hours with 200$. So I Just a note: in English, the dollar sign ($) goes before the number amount. So, "two hundred dollars" would be $200.
So I “Rented” is a more appropriate word. When doing something for a certain amount of time “for” is used.
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It was quite expensive for me, however, I didn't regret when I went there. It was quite expensive for me, tho It was quite expensive for me, however, I didn't regret it when I went there. “Regret” normally is used with a noun, in this case “it” would be used.
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In the house, there were many toys and books as well. |
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One side of the wall of the pool, we could watch video contents for kids using a projector. On one side of the I just re-worded your sentence a bit to make it sound more natural, but nothing was wrong with your original sentence.
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My kids really liked there and enjoyed for about 6 hours. My kids really liked it there, and enjoyed swimming for about 6 hours. My kids really liked it there and enjoyed there for about 6 hours. |
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If I have a chance, I want to go there again. If I have |
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