At the beginning of this time ofmy English learning English, I rejected learning from teachers because I didn't want to pay for the learning, and I believed that I could learn English myself. At the beginning of my English learning, I rejected learning from teachers because I didn't want to pay for learning, and I believed that I could learn English myself.

At the beginning of this time ofWhen I started learning English, I rejected learning from teachers because I didn't want to pay for the learningclasses, and I believed that I could learn English myself. When I started learning English, I rejected learning from teachers because I didn't want to pay for the classes, and I believed that I could learn English myself.

At the beginning of this time ofWhen I first started learning English, I rejected learning from teachers because I didn't want to pay for the learning, and I believed that I could learn English myself. When I first started learning English, I rejected learning from teachers because I didn't want to pay for the learning, and I believed that I could learn English myself.

What you wrote isn't wrong, but it sounds awkward.

At the beginning of this time ofWhen I started learning English, I rejected learning from teachers because I didn't want to pay for the learning, and I believed that I could learn English myself. When I started learning English, I rejected learning from teachers because I didn't want to pay for the learning, and I believed that I could learn English myself.

At the beginning of this time ofWhen I first started learning English, I rejectedfused to learning from teachers because I didn't want to pay for the learning, and I believed that I could learn English myself. When I first started learning English, I refused to learn from teachers because I didn't want to pay and believed that I could learn English myself.

In the first year, I learned English in the same way as I did when I was in middle school. In the first year, I learned English in the same way I did when I was in middle school.

"as" doesn't seem grammatically wrong here, it just feels awkward

One year lateAfter a year, I found out that it did not help my speaking. After a year, I found that it did not help my speaking.

One year lateAfter a year, I found out that it did not help my speaking. After a year, I found that it did not help my speaking.

Sounds more natural

But I still didn't want to buy online lessons, and I thought that if I could write well, I would speak well. But I still didn't want to buy online lessons, and I thought that if I could write well, I would speak well.

Great! This reads quite naturally.

I was very excited when I had this idea popped up in my mind. I was very excited when I had this idea.

I was very excited whento pursue this idea popped up in my mind. I was excited to pursue this idea.

I have changed the meaning slightly, but it sounds more natural to me. Popped in my mind is usually used for a more sudden thought.

I practiced writing in English for another year, but I still couldn't open my mouth to speak Englishit. I practiced writing in English for another year, but I still couldn't open my mouth to speak it.

I practiced writing in English for another year, but I still couldn't open my mouth to speak English. I practiced writing in English for another year, but I still couldn't open my mouth to speak English.

Also very natural, good job.

I realized that I couldn't speak English until I practiced English with an Englishwith a teacher every day, so I started to book online lessons. I realized that I couldn't speak English until I practiced with a teacher every day, so I started to book online lessons.

Your way works but saying "English" so much sounds weird, so this is more natural.

I realized that I cwouldn't not be able to speak English untilwell unless I practiced English with an Englishwith a teacher every day, so I started to book online lessons. I realized that I would not be able to speak English well unless I practiced with a teacher every day, so I started to book online lessons.

I was very hesitant before I decided to book online lessonse, because it was a brand new thingvery new for me. I was very hesitant before I decided to book one, because it was very new for me.

Not incorrect, but this sounds more natural.

There were many things that I needed to take into considerationhink about. There were many things that I needed to think about.

Not incorrect either, but this sounds more natural.

Finally, I found an online school which offered a cheaper price for lessons, that I thought cwould be more affordable. Finally, I found an online school which offered cheaper lessons, that I thought would be more affordable.

Not incorrect, but this sounds more natural.

Finally, I found an online school which offered a cheaper price for lessons that (I thought could be/seemed) affordable. Finally, I found an online school which offered a cheaper price for lessons that (I thought could be/seemed) affordable.

In the first one or twofew months, I could only partly understand my English teachers and I struggled to speak in English. In the first few months, I could only partly understand my English teachers and I struggled to speak in English.

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In the first one or two months, I could only partly understand my English teachers, and so, I struggled to speak in English. In the first one or two months, I could only partly understand my English teachers, and so, I struggled to speak in English.

It was very hard to express the feeling that you wanted to tell people your ideas, but you were not able to, so I often got depressed, frustrated and even upset. It was very hard to express the feeling that you wanted to tell people your ideas, but you were not able to, so I often got depressed, frustrated and even upset.

"even" suggests that the word after it will be even more severe than the words before it. But "depressed" and "frustrated" are stronger emotions than upset, so "even" doesn't make much sense here. Better: "depressed, frustrated and upset." Best: "upset, frustrated, and even depressed" or "frustrated and depressed"

It was very hard to express the feeling that you wanted to tell people yourmy ideas, but you wereI was not able to, so I often got depressed, frustrated and even upset. It was very hard to express my ideas, but I was not able to, so I often got depressed, frustrated and even upset.

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It was very hard to not be able to express the feeling that you wanted to tell people your ideas, but you were not able to, so I often got depressed, frustrated and even upset. It was very hard to not be able to express the feeling that you wanted to tell people, so I often got depressed, frustrated and even upset.

Since the end of June of last year, I have been learning English from online English teachers for more than one year, and now I can speak Englishit more easily than before. Since the end of June of last year, I have been learning English from online English teachers for more than one year, and now I can speak it more easily than before.

Since the end of June of last year, I have been learning English from online English teachers for more than oneover a year, and now I can speak English more easily than before. Since the end of June of last year, I have been learning English from online English teachers for over a year, and now I can speak English more easily than before.

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Although now I can speak English, I speak slowly, and often times I still have difficulties expressing myself. Although now I can speak English, I speak slowly, and oftentimes I still have difficulties expressing myself.

In addition, tenses, articles and parts of speeches are still the most difficult part for me. In addition, tenses, articles and parts of speech are still the most difficult part for me.

In addition, tenses, articles and partfigures of speeches are still the most difficult part for me. In addition, tenses, articles and figures of speech are still the most difficult part for me.

If you mean non-literal expressions, the term for that is figures of speech.

In addition, tenses, articles and other parts of speeches are still the most difficult part for me. In addition, tenses, articles and other parts of speech are still the most difficult part for me.