Oct. 7, 2021
WRITERS.
I specially admire the people with the capacity of writing beautifully, because :
• They possess talent for writing about fantasy or real world in an amaze form. They have the capacity of transporting you to places, feeling, scenes, ages without problem.
• Writers can give order to their own ideas or feelings, allowing to other people give order to their ones through their writing.
• Some writers utilize their abilities for manipulating situations, people, even countries with their knowledge of using the appropriate word in the opportune moment. I disagree about this behave, but it is happening.
• This people habitually enjoy others fascinating qualities, as, imagination, observation, curiosity, introspection, analysis, criticism.
• They display the talent of expressing and perceiving the life in a creative form.
I am so grateful because talent people like them, because they color life.
WRITERS.
Simply just write the title as: "Writers"
No need for all capitals; no need for a full-stop
I specially admire the people with the capacity of writing beautifully, because :
I especially admire people with the capacity to write beautifully because:
No need for a comma before "because".
Your use of the colon (:) is correct because you are introducing a list.
• They possess talent for writing about fantasy or real world in an amaze form.
I don't think a capital letter at "They" is required here. Your use of the word "because" before the colon indicates that you are continuing the sentence which has already begun with "I especially admire ..." Whether or not to use a capital letter after a colon has some differences of opinion, but i think that where the word "because" connects two pieces of information, usually there should be no capital letter on the word that follows "because". See https://www.grammarly.com/blog/capitalization-after-colons/
See below for other comments relating to this phrase/ sentence.
They have the capacity of transporting you to places, feeling, scenes, ages without problem.
They have the capacity to transport you to places, scenes and to an age without problems.
I think you will have to use "feeling" in another sentence to get over your idea here.
• Writers can give order to their own ideas or feelings, allowing to other people to give order to their ones through their writing.
I was a bit confused as to whom "their" referred at the end of the sentence. I think this text needs rewriting to enhance understanding.
• Some writers utilize their abilities for manipulating situations, people, and even countries with their knowledge of usemploying the appropriate word inat the opportune moment.
Consider writing the simple word "use" instead of "utilize".
"I disagree about thiswith the use of such behaveiour, but it is happening."¶
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Do you still admire this quality in these people? Look back at your phrase that begins "I specially admire the people with the capacity of writing beautifully, because :"
• This people habitually enjoy others fascinating qualities, as, imagination, observation, curiosity, introspection, analysis, criticism.
These people habitually enjoy others' fascinating qualities, such as imagination, observation, curiosity, introspection, analysis and criticism.
• They display the talent of expressing and perceiving the life in a creative form.
I am so grateful because talent people like them, because they color life.
I am so grateful to talented people like these because they add color to life.
Note the alternative spelling of "color" = "colour".
Feedback
Thank you for a nice story!
My advice to you would be to avoid using a lot of text in a bullet point. Try to put your thoughts and ideas into sentences that flow, one to the other. Bullet points can be distracting and can often cause misunderstanding if the point has a lot to say! A little "guiding rule" here would be that if your bullet point needs any further punctuation other than the humble comma, don't use the bullet point at all to get your idea across. Instead, use normal sentences.
Here is an attempt by me to provide a possible alternative:
Writers
For several reasons, I admire people with the capacity to write beautifully. They posses a talent for writing about fantasy or the real world in an amazing way, a way that can transport you to different places and scenes; and to an age and time having none of the problems of the present world.
Through their efforts, these writers provide for their ideas and feelings an order that can be copied by others; and through their observations of others, they habitually appreciate and enjoy the fascinating qualities of their fellow men and women, such as demonstrated through imagination, curiosity, introspection, analysis and criticism.
However, some writers use their abilities for their own advantage. They do this by manipulating people, situations and even countries whilst using discerning words at opportune times. I do not approve of this use of their talents, but this is reality.
In summary, although some of these writers have selfish motivations, the majority of them provide enlightenment through their talent for perceiving and expressing life in all of its creative forms. On balance, I am very grateful to these talented people for the colour they bring to life.
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I hope my comments help you.
Sincerely,
mjm
Oct. 8, 2021
"I disagree about thiswith the use of such behaveiour, but it is happening."¶
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Do you still admire this quality in these people? Look back at your phrase that begins "I specially admire the people with the capacity of writing beautifully, because :"
I admire the ability to handle words, but not the misuse of this ability.
Oct. 8, 2021
Thank you very much for explaining to me where my mistakes are and showing me why it is wrong.
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WRITERS. WRITERS. Simply just write the title as: "Writers"
No need for all capitals; no need for a full-stop |
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I specially admire the people with the capacity of writing beautifully, because : I specially admire the people with the capacity of writing beautifully, because : I especially admire people with the capacity to write beautifully because:
No need for a comma before "because". Your use of the colon (:) is correct because you are introducing a list. |
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• They possess talent for writing about fantasy or real world in an amaze form. • They possess talent for writing about fantasy or real world in an amaze form. I don't think a capital letter at "They" is required here. Your use of the word "because" before the colon indicates that you are continuing the sentence which has already begun with "I especially admire ..." Whether or not to use a capital letter after a colon has some differences of opinion, but i think that where the word "because" connects two pieces of information, usually there should be no capital letter on the word that follows "because". See https://www.grammarly.com/blog/capitalization-after-colons/
See below for other comments relating to this phrase/ sentence. |
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They have the capacity of transporting you to places, feeling, scenes, ages without problem. They have the capacity of transporting you to places, feeling, scenes, ages without problem. They have the capacity to transport you to places, scenes and to an age without problems.
I think you will have to use "feeling" in another sentence to get over your idea here. |
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• Writers can give order to their own ideas or feelings, allowing to other people give order to their ones through their writing. • Writers can give order to their own ideas or feelings, allowing I was a bit confused as to whom "their" referred at the end of the sentence. I think this text needs rewriting to enhance understanding.
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• Some writers utilize their abilities for manipulating situations, people, even countries with their knowledge of using the appropriate word in the opportune moment. • Some writers utilize their abilities for manipulating situations, people Consider writing the simple word "use" instead of "utilize".
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I disagree about this behave, but it is happening. "I disagree |
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• This people habitually enjoy others fascinating qualities, as, imagination, observation, curiosity, introspection, analysis, criticism. • This people habitually enjoy others fascinating qualities, as, imagination, observation, curiosity, introspection, analysis, criticism. These people habitually enjoy others' fascinating qualities, such as imagination, observation, curiosity, introspection, analysis and criticism.
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• They display the talent of expressing and perceiving the life in a creative form. • They display the talent of expressing and perceiving |
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I am so grateful because talent people like them, because they color life. I am so grateful because talent people like them, because they color life. I am so grateful to talented people like these because they add color to life.
Note the alternative spelling of "color" = "colour". |
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