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Nov. 26, 2021

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A Dream About Premature Birth

Last night, I had a weird dream about premature birth. In my dream, I gave birth to a baby that was as small as a human‘s thumb. Because of how fragile the baby was, I tried my best to take extra care of them. In a jar, I soaked the baby with some nutrient liquid in red. It looked like those jars with part of human body in scientific laboratory. I know how weird it sounds but in my dream my intention was solely good. I remember I was happy that the baby in a jar is in good care, so I took the entire jar around to show my parent their grandchild. My parent weren’t impressed, but they noticed the baby was not moving. Immediately, I realized my baby has drowned in the liquid and I panicky tried to perform first-aid on them. Although the baby was still alive, the first-aid didn’t work so I had to rush them to hospital. On my way to hospital, I encountered so many obstacles such as traffic jam, getting lost, etc. When we finally arrived at the hospital, I noticed the baby has turned purple. Deep in my heart, I know it was too late. But I still begged the medical team to save my baby. Nevertheless, they announced the death of my baby shortly after and my heart was torn apart.

I think the reason I had this dream is because I learned about my friend’s miscarriage not long ago. Her unborn baby was six-month old in her stomach when they gone. I sympathised her a lot but after the dream I had, I feel her pain even more. Although I have yet to be a mother, through that dream I realized a parent who lost their child can never be their same self again.


<p>Thank you in advance for correcting my writing! Feel free to suggest me better sentences even if mine are not technically wrong. ^^<br><br></p>

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A Dream About Premature Birth

Last night, I had a weird dream about premature birth.

In my dream, I gave birth to a baby that was as small as a human‘s thumb.

Because of how fragile the baby was, I tried my best to take extra care of them.

In a jar, I soaked the baby in a jar with some red nutrient liquid in red.

It looked like those jars with part of human body parts in scientific laboratoryies.

I know how weird it sounds but in my dream my intention was solely good.

This is grammatically fine, but 'my intention was solely good' sounds a little stiff and formal.
'but in my dreams I only had good intentions' sounds more natural to me.

I remember I was happy that the baby in a jar iwas in good care, so I took the entire jar around to show my parents their grandchild.

Make sure to keep consistent past tense.

My parents weren’t impressed, but they noticed the baby was not moving.

Immediately, I realized my baby hasd drowned in the liquid and I, panickying, tried to perform first-aid on them.

'Panicky' isn't a word, unfortunately.

Although the baby was still alive, the first-aid didn’t work so I had to rush them to hospital.

On my way to hospital, I encountered so many obstacles such as a traffic jam, getting lost, etc.

When we finally arrived at the hospital, I noticed the baby hasd turned purple.

This should be past tense.

Deep in my heart, I knoew it was too late.

Should be past tense.

But I still begged the medical team to save my baby.

Nevertheless, they announced the death of my baby shortly after and my heart was torn apart.

I think the reason I had this dream is because I learned about my friend’s miscarriage not long ago.

Her unborn baby was six-months old in her stomach when they gone.

I sympathised with her a lot but after the dream I had, I feel her pain even more.

Although I have yet to be a mother, through that dream I realized a parent who lost their child can never be their same self again.

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This sounds like such an awful nightmare :( I can't imagine how horrific it would be if this happened in real life, like with your friend.

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ethilda

Nov. 26, 2021

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Thank you so much for such detailed corrections. It’s such a big help and I really appreciate it! 🧡
Yeah, you are right. I feel so bad for my friend.😔

A Dream About Premature Birth

Last night, I had a weird dream about premature birth.

In my dream, I gave birth to a baby that was as small as a human‘s thumb.

Because of how fragile the baby was, I tried my best to take extra care of them.

In a jar, I soaked the baby with some nutrient liquid in red.

In a jar, I soaked the baby in a jar with some red nutrient liquid in red.

It looked like those jars with part of human body in scientific laboratory.

It looked like those jars with part of human body parts in scientific laboratoryies.

I know how weird it sounds but in my dream my intention was solely good.

I know how weird it sounds but in my dream my intention was solely good.

I remember I was happy that the baby in a jar is in good care, so I took the entire jar around to show my parent their grandchild.

I remember I was happy that the baby in a jar iwas in good care, so I took the entire jar around to show my parents their grandchild.

My parent weren’t impressed, but the notice the baby was not moving.

Immediately, I realized my baby has drowned in the liquid and I panicky tried to perform first-aid on them.

Immediately, I realized my baby hasd drowned in the liquid and I, panickying, tried to perform first-aid on them.

Although the baby was still alive, the first-aid didn’t work so I had to rush them to hospital.

On my way to hospital, I encountered so many obstacles such as traffic jam, getting lost, etc.

On my way to hospital, I encountered so many obstacles such as a traffic jam, getting lost, etc.

When we finally arrived at the hospital, I noticed the baby has turned purple.

When we finally arrived at the hospital, I noticed the baby hasd turned purple.

Deep in my heart, I know I was too late.

But I still begged the medical team to save my baby.

Nevertheless, the announced the death of my baby short after and my heart was torn apart.

I think the reason I had this dream is because I learned about my friend’s miscarriage not long ago.

Her unborn baby was six-month old in her stomach when they gone.

Her unborn baby was six-months old in her stomach when they gone.

I sympathised her a lot but after the dream I had, I feel her pain even more.

I sympathised with her a lot but after the dream I had, I feel her pain even more.

Although I have yet to be a mother, through that dream I realized a parent who lost their child can never be their same self again.

My parent weren’t impressed, but they noticed the baby was not moving.

My parents weren’t impressed, but they noticed the baby was not moving.

Deep in my heart, I know it was too late.

Deep in my heart, I knoew it was too late.

Nevertheless, they announced the death of my baby shortly after and my heart was torn apart.

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